Dear Diary,
Today i witnessed the be perhaps the best day of my life.My dreams of marrying someone called Ernest are coming true , I am marrying someone called Ernest.Can you believe it?It all commenced when Mr Worthing started to talk the weather, which made me feel nervous as whenever people talk to me about the weather ,I always feel quite certain that they mean something else.I started to feel nervous.I told Mr Worthing to take advantage of Mamma's temporary absence and i advised him to do so.Oh dear diary, i am sure you are aware as much as me of Mamma's way of coming back suddently into a room that i discussed with her at numerous times.But suddenly he declared his love to me and asked me if i loved him.The only response i could give was 'Passionately'.
For an eccentric reason,my own Ernest asked me if I would still love him if his name was not Ernest.But i told him Ernest produces vibrations.It is such a divine name.The only safe name is Ernest!Silly Ernest he forgot to propose me.I told him quite frankly that i was fully determined to accept my own Ernest.
Mamma entered and disturbed our privacy by saying that Papa and her will decide who I will be engaged to.I reproached her but mamma instructed me to get in the carriage.The old fashioned respect for the young is fast dying out.
My dear diary help me , my eternal love for the name Ernest is much frankly immense.Mamma needs to understand that this name is divine!
www: A very good approach to the personality of Gwendolen
ReplyDeleteebi: include more references to the play
www: good use of referential text
ReplyDeleteebi: more examples of the characters personality being displayed.
www: the language used linked to the way the text was written.
ReplyDeleteyou've used a wide variety of language skills. good use of emotive language ''OH dear diary''
ebi: your typo's are HORRENDOUS! :)
www good integration of the text (and by inference your study of it) into the diary entry. You make some good choices about what to include and the 'sound' of the diary appears authentic.
ReplyDeleteebi I agree with Rana, you have to tidy up the errors both typos and basic grammar both of which pull your mark down.
A GOOD START